tookatooka
402 posts
Aug 21, 2009
5:39 AM
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Woke up this mornin' with my B-flat in my hand,
My woman's gone and left me cos she couldn't understand.
Just for fun. Next line please.
You're only allowed one line and someone else must post before you can post another.
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When I'm not blowing, I'm drawing.
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Preston
475 posts
Aug 21, 2009
5:43 AM
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I live my life a melody
and for those who don't it's hard to see
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Hollistonharper
124 posts
Aug 21, 2009
6:01 AM
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But if you ever try to take my harp from me
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tookatooka
404 posts
Aug 21, 2009
7:34 AM
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Hmmm! seem to have gone awry here, I'll try and bring it back into line. Apologies Preston and Hollistonharper I didn't make the requirements clearer.
Woke up this mornin' with my B-flat in my hand,
My woman's gone and left me cos she couldn't understand.
I live my life a melody and for those who don't it's hard to see,
So don't you ever ever ever take my harp away from me.
OK. Next line please. (but hey! only if you want to).
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When I'm not blowing, I'm drawing.
Last Edited by on Aug 21, 2009 7:34 AM
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RyanMortos
262 posts
Aug 21, 2009
9:00 AM
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A stack of oskars. A stack of hohners. Suzukis & seydels
I play them all around town with a message to send
Yeah, they just c'aint understand
That these harps are this bluesman's best friend
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~Ryan
Pennsylvania - H.A.R.P. (Harmonica Association 'Round Philly)
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congaron
72 posts
Aug 21, 2009
9:15 AM
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I got the baby gone and left me blues...
And it's harder than i 'spected.
I don't know what to do...
ain't used to bein' so rejected...
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Kyzer Sosa
34 posts
Aug 21, 2009
10:16 AM
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its called iambic pentameter, guys, in case you didnt know..
a few of you moved a bit too fast and others way too slow...
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congaron
76 posts
Aug 21, 2009
10:26 AM
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Was that your verse Kyser?
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Kyzer Sosa
35 posts
Aug 21, 2009
10:38 AM
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yes
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XHarp
131 posts
Aug 21, 2009
10:57 AM
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Not sure about that iambic pentameter thingy but here's how it could lay out so far in traditional call and answer style. (took some license with the lyrics)
Woke up this mornin' with my b-flat in my hand
Yes I woke up this mornin' with my b-flat in my hand
My women rolled over and saw me but she just couldn't understand.
I live my life as a melody but some don't seem to see
OH I live life like a melody but others just can't see.
Too bad for the fool who tries to take these harps from me.
Play my harps all over town with just one message to send
I play this music all over town with just one message to send.
That these harps is this bluesman's lonely old friend.
Now.... Let's get the chorus in there
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"Keep it in your mouth" - XHarp
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harpinonfire
8 posts
Aug 21, 2009
11:06 AM
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Yes, I woke up this mornin' with my harp in my hand.
My woman--Why, she didn't even try to understand
Didn't try to understand.
Well now the harp hit my lips and the blues began to flow.
Yes. the blues began to flow.
Even my old dog Juke joined in as he began to whine.
Just din't know he'd miss her so.
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Andrew
531 posts
Aug 22, 2009
7:22 AM
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This is the second time someone has tried to show off his knowledge of metre and got it wrong!
Kyzer, an iamb is a two-syllabled foot, i.e. a word like "begin", with an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable.
(A word like Peter with the stress reversed is called a trochee)
"Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?" is five iambs (with syncopation) count them - that's why it's called an iambic pentameter - pente is Greek for five.
Your lines have SEVEN beats (count them), not five. They are iambic heptameters - hepta is Greek for seven.
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oldwailer
866 posts
Aug 22, 2009
10:25 AM
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Andrew;
You reminded me of a little poem I wrote many years ago when I was about fed up with being an English major with a minor in Geology--
Rhombohedrohexoctagonaled.
Ramb dithyd.
Iambs tetrad.
Somebody has his finger up my antichrist.
In an effort to get back on topic--this is the blues, man--nobody really counts the iambs! ;-)
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nacoran
161 posts
Aug 22, 2009
5:43 PM
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Maybe she left you for someone with one of those long tremolos? Or someone who wasn't flat first thing in the morning...
Lets see-
Woke up this mornin' with my B-flat in my hand,
My woman's gone and left me cos she couldn't understand.
She said that lips are for kissin'
And now hers are kissing another man.
But it don't bother me and I don't listen
Cause I'm playing in a band
My lips where made for caressing
Making sweet melody
Hers where made for lying
Practiced to deceive
That don't mean I don't miss her
Her lying lips as sweet as wine
But I'm making sweeter music
With this here harp of mine.
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Andrew
532 posts
Aug 23, 2009
2:08 AM
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Can I just say that I like the sexual innuendo of Tooka's first two lines, and I really think they should be continued in the same vein (there's another for ya), but I don't have any ideas.
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tookatooka
408 posts
Aug 23, 2009
4:18 AM
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Hey! nacoran. I do like that.
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When I'm not blowing, I'm drawing.
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kudzurunner
661 posts
Aug 23, 2009
4:19 AM
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Eugene Redmond would be moaning, Sterling Plumpp would be howling too....
To see how badly y'all baby-steps-walkin', foot-draggin', not-yet-ready-for-prime-time wannabe blues poets are at cramming the right number of feet into your heartbreakingly slack-ass blues
Last Edited by on Aug 23, 2009 4:21 AM
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tookatooka
409 posts
Aug 23, 2009
4:40 AM
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Hey! Adam. Red rag to a bull. I see a blues poetry contest coming up.
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When I'm not blowing, I'm drawing.
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Andrew
533 posts
Aug 23, 2009
5:07 AM
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Ah woke up this mornin',
ker choong ker choong,
Got out of bed,
ker choong ker choong,
Only had fine ground coffee left,
which would have clogged up the cafetiere mesh (my preferred method of making it), so I had to sacrifice at least half the flavor by making it with a filter paper instead.
mmm, oh yeah!
ker choong ker choong
ah got those ante meridiem caffeine withdrawal blues
mmm, oh yeah!
Howd I do?
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Andrew
534 posts
Aug 23, 2009
5:37 AM
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Woke up this mornin'
with my B-flat in my hand,
My woman's gone and left me
cos she couldn't understand.
<>
Ah said, "we tried every position
We coulda tried all night
But there weren't no point in continuin'
cos your overblow technique ain't right."
<>
she said, "well I was hopin'
you knew your way around
but even when you spat in the 3-hole
you still couldn't bend it all the way down"
<>
Well imagine how it's hurt my feelin's
Now she's replaced me in the band
And that's why I woke up this mornin'
with my B-flat in my hand.
mmmm, yeah!
Last Edited by on Aug 23, 2009 6:01 AM
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tookatooka
410 posts
Aug 23, 2009
6:51 AM
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Snigger. And there was me thinkin' we had an academic intellectual on the forum. I did smile though.
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When I'm not blowing, I'm drawing.
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Andrew
535 posts
Aug 23, 2009
7:01 AM
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My brain thinks; my ass farts. I'm a rounded human being.
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Kyzer Sosa
36 posts
Aug 23, 2009
11:24 AM
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yeah, but you got the jist....
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kudzurunner
662 posts
Aug 23, 2009
11:31 AM
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Andrew wins!
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Miles Dewar
397 posts
Aug 23, 2009
12:29 PM
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I agree.
But whose lookin around for their shoes?
woke up this morning, looked around for my shoes, you could tell by that now people, I had these old..............""
Last Edited by on Aug 23, 2009 12:29 PM
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oldwailer
868 posts
Aug 23, 2009
1:22 PM
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Yeah, Miles--and who is gonna dust my broom?
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nacoran
162 posts
Aug 23, 2009
10:00 PM
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Great thread. If I could only pick one thing to do for the rest of my life I think I'd pick sitting at a Denny's with a couple friends bouncing lyrics off each other and drinking free refills.
I was pretty happy with mine until I read Andrew's. I should have looked for a few more harp references and pushed the innuendo. RFLMAO.
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